townx - 10 minutes of 2007-01-25 (23 hours late!): Constrained - Comments

Thanks Pete, comment much

elliot — Mon, 29 Jan 2007 06:35:24 -0600

Thanks Pete, comment much appreciated. I know the quality is variable, but I'm really enjoying myself, and it's a bonus that you like some of them too.

Haha this is brilliant, my

Pete Graham — Sat, 27 Jan 2007 11:50:36 -0600

Haha this is brilliant, my favourite poem yet and the one about the P.E teacher was pretty damn good!

10 minutes of 2007-01-25 (23 hours late!): Constrained

elliot — Fri, 26 Jan 2007 16:44:44 -0600

This one is about a woman who often goes to the supermarket the same time as me every day. Her makeup is terrible. I'm sure she'd look better without it. I put constraints on the construction of the poem to force me to be creative (seven lines, seven syllables per line, five lines starting with "s", two with "n"). Also to reflect the theme.

Constrained

Separated from her face,
She searches the aisles, hidden.
Smile trapped behind thick mask
Somewhere in frozen gateaus.
Shouldn't someone tell her there's

No need for orange layers;
No one thinks it is her skin.